I think you go a *little* bit into Gwen-bashing, which I think is justified in some ways by the story but not in others.
For instance, OK, Jack doesn't like cops, so his general unwillingness to have Gwen join is justified--but the *reason* that he doesn't like cops is (and yes, I know, I didn't say anything when you posted the chapter to begin with) is a bit...odd (odd inasmuch as I have a hard time believing that cops would use a person as target practice, let along for anything other than kill-shots)--and that makes it seem like you're coming up with an over-the-top reason for his dislike of her, and *that* makes it seem more like bashing.
Sorry, I write long sentences. :)
There are a few other instances. I'd have to go back and reread your earlier fics, but off the top of my head, her inability to understand that Jack wouldn't want her to touch him after being raped, or that Eleya really *didn't* want to be picked up (and I haven't read the latest chapter yet, but I saw a bit where she expressed severe skepticism that Ianto was the SiC because, as far as she could tell, he didn't "have any training). These things makes Gwen seem *far* more...vapid? self-centered? than she actually is. Gwen has an abundance of faults (making her one of two or three, I believe, TV characters I actively dislike) but she *is* empathic, observant, and actually quite good at being a cop. After all, she's clearly smart enough to shake off the Retcon, which apparently can happen among the very intelligent, and was able to recognize Susie's knife as being the murder weapon, even though she couldn't have really seen it for more than a few seconds and didn't get a real opportunity to study it. She just has a lot of personality flaws which are made worse by the show's writer's constantly saying "You MUST like Gwen, or else!"
That being said: You're not blatantly bashing Gwen. I've seen *really* bad bashing fics, and you're nowhere near them. I think that in a *few* cases your dislike of her bleeds out into the character's minds, but as long as you're *trying* to write her fairly, that should be enough.
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For instance, OK, Jack doesn't like cops, so his general unwillingness to have Gwen join is justified--but the *reason* that he doesn't like cops is (and yes, I know, I didn't say anything when you posted the chapter to begin with) is a bit...odd (odd inasmuch as I have a hard time believing that cops would use a person as target practice, let along for anything other than kill-shots)--and that makes it seem like you're coming up with an over-the-top reason for his dislike of her, and *that* makes it seem more like bashing.
Sorry, I write long sentences. :)
There are a few other instances. I'd have to go back and reread your earlier fics, but off the top of my head, her inability to understand that Jack wouldn't want her to touch him after being raped, or that Eleya really *didn't* want to be picked up (and I haven't read the latest chapter yet, but I saw a bit where she expressed severe skepticism that Ianto was the SiC because, as far as she could tell, he didn't "have any training). These things makes Gwen seem *far* more...vapid? self-centered? than she actually is. Gwen has an abundance of faults (making her one of two or three, I believe, TV characters I actively dislike) but she *is* empathic, observant, and actually quite good at being a cop. After all, she's clearly smart enough to shake off the Retcon, which apparently can happen among the very intelligent, and was able to recognize Susie's knife as being the murder weapon, even though she couldn't have really seen it for more than a few seconds and didn't get a real opportunity to study it. She just has a lot of personality flaws which are made worse by the show's writer's constantly saying "You MUST like Gwen, or else!"
That being said: You're not blatantly bashing Gwen. I've seen *really* bad bashing fics, and you're nowhere near them. I think that in a *few* cases your dislike of her bleeds out into the character's minds, but as long as you're *trying* to write her fairly, that should be enough.